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They want to prevail unity all around the world to make the same shelter for all kinds of
people either Black or White.
In summary, all of the people have the same right to live in equal conditions, so by
cooperation among developed countries and the Third World ones, it will be possible to
have a better world with equality.
Very good
But consider the sentences marked in blue once again. The first sentence means that they
do help the poor countries, but you certainly mean the opposite, don t you? In the second
one, mentioning Black or White is biased language and is not acceptable. Besides, the
word comparative does not make sense. I recommend you to change it.
Good luck!
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